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what do you mean by “Why did I have to find her Mum?" she yelled out. “It’s not fair." Whats that for? I dont get it
I loved it...the part where it becomes a cat is the best twist, it makes a real good climax and ending. awesome story
Only problem I had was that I picked up on the fact it was their cat almost instantly. Other then that was a good read, worth it without a doubt.
Sophie is the name of my cat too :).
kind of obvious that your talking about a cat, Im no sure if you were really trying to hide it though. I mean, I think the parent would have been a little more upset/aghast at finding a dead person in the middle of the road. Not exactly something you just walk away from and "make calls from your house" for. Anyways, overall pretty good writing, although a tad over-dramatic at times in my opinion. Keep working!!
i thought that the mom had hit something, thats why she wasn't acting so shocked. About half way through i told my self "watch it not even be a person"
i thought it was like the little girl's imaginary friend or sumthin like dat..cuz it kind of didnt make sense for them tu juss leave sophie at the side of the road if she was actually a human..so i kind of expected a wierd ending..
A couple of grammatical errors but otherwise a good read. Liked the suspense. I thought initially it was going to be a child and then thought a dog so it kept me going until the cat collar.
I cannot say that I enjoyed this very much. It was not very well written, and most of the conversation was choppy and stiff, not natural at all.Here is one of the best examples:" 'I really wish that was the case,' said her mother calmly as she turned to look down at the roadside."And there was no real emotion nor much of a plot in the short story. The idea was nice, but I think that the execution was very poor and didn't get the desired point across. Nice attempt.
Was Sophie a real person? I don't get it!Sophie was a cat
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